I've been working for a while on a stage adaptation of John Milton's Paradise Lost. It's written in poetic prose, mainly so I can build scenes centered around dialogue. I want language that audiences can grasp readily while still retaining Milton's tone. Since it's a play, meant to exist in time and space, the audience doesn't get the opportunity to reread as they stumble over complex syntax constructions. This speech is a combination of Satan's first speech to his legions when he first calls them from the burning lake in Book I, and his address to Pandemonium in Book II. Let me know what you think, I'm not entirely happy with it and I can't exactly put my finger on what I don't like.

Also, Satan and Beelzebub are separate characters in the poem; Beelzebub is Satan's main lieutenant.

Here it is:

Satan:

Princes, Dominions, Progeny of light, have you chosen to slumber here as in the vales of Heaven? Or in these poses, are you abjectly adoring the Almighty? Awake, arise, or be forever fallen!

A great army assembles.

(Quieter, to Beelzebub alone) Now we try what might be regained in Heaven, or what more lost in Hell.

O Immortal Spirits! Faithful friends and partners to our loss. Know that your strife was not inglorious. The event was dire, as this place testifies. Who could have foreseen that such a united force of gods, as such stands here, could ever be repulsed? Yet His strength was hidden from us, which tempted our attempt and wrought our fall. But I give not Heaven up for lost. Fellow Deities, who with the strength of our dire arms shook the Empyrean all throughout. No deep within her gulf can hold us, though oppressed and fallen. From this descent, Celestial virtues rise within us, more dread, more glorious, than from no fall. We, whom the stings and scorns of His thunder have made greater, with union and firm faith, will return to claim our just inheritance of old.

Considering this is a speechwriting subreddit, thought I might be able to get a unique take on it. I'm entirely ignorant of what speech-writing theory entails.

New here, but very curious: has anyone got a clue as to how to get involved in the very limited business of speechwriting?

Feel free to pm, but, as reference, I already have published some articles (not speeches) and had a career involving writing--but not as a writer. Seems like a weird black box to me.

Thanks,

So I am not sure if this is even the correct sub to get such broad help, but I need someone to help me with my speech. I am in an intro class and the only speech I have ever written was the last one for this class.

I am doing a persuasive argument on why people should do artsy activities (jewelry making, woodwork, painting, etc) but my teacher is woefully bad at helping us write these speeches.

She gave us some papers, one with the Motivated Sequence and the other with the Higharchy of Needs. But all she has really said is "don't tell them you're going to persuade them" and "once you get to the visualization step you can't go back".

I have no concept of what kind of information to use to persuade, what kind of problem to identify to persuade them to do my activity, no concept of how to open the speech.

All I have is those 2 papers and some stats from a class survey.

Someone please help me here.

Thanks

So, I'm doing original oratory next season and Want to get a start on topics. Which topic seems most engaging to you?

Title; You're Neurotypical, Get Over It.

Intro; scenario

Body 1; Self diagnosis had become a problem/parasite within our world that we've all chosen to ignore.

Body 2; We often dismiss real mental illness, yet love to use them as descriptors towards our behaviors.

Body 3; ???

Conclusion; 'maybe next time you hear someone say 'oh I'm sooo OCD' you should being it into question. Etc.'

Title; Money CAN Buy Happiness

Intro; Scenario

Body 1; People in poverty, state of life in 3rd world countries, etc.

Body 2; Homeless people, people's reluctance to donate, SHAMING people who are less fortunate.

Body 3; the 1%, or something else. Conclusion; compel people to donate, volunteer, etc.

Title; Get Down with Getting High

Intro; Scenario

Body 1; how many people are in jail for non-violent drug offenses, and how that's wrong compared to the other offenses.

Body 2; prohibition compared to the war on drugs.

Body 3; Legalizing marijuana, and maybe legalizing other drugs. Conclusion; ??

What an excellent idea for a subreddit. I'm a communications / political science student so I'll be keeping an eye on this sub. Just yesterday, I was putting the finishing touches on an assignment: a speech for Toronto mayor, Rob Ford. It would have been great to consult this very group.

I have heard different speeches being given where the speakers numbered his main points. And was interested in reading material that deal with this method.

So, if you have a link to any good articles that explain these concepts or a video that talks about it, please share it.

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Clowns have lost their national values, as mimes have come from their dirty ghetto streets and have danced on are great democrazy. We must bring back circus values by reintroducing clowns back into the medium. As mimes have demonised us and have stolen the funny hour we once juggled.

As a last resort I have initiated order 69 and I will spread my seeds across cyberspace to germinate new generations of clowns.

So I’m my brothers’ best man for his wedding coming up, I have a ton of ideas of what I want to say, but I can seem to put it all together. Any tips ?

As someone who doesn't normally write, I thought that trying my hand at speech writing in my spare time would be beneficial in maintaining a creative mind and keeping my communication skills sharp. However, I can't think of anything to specifically write about. Is there anything that you would use to jump-start the writing process?

I am just a month in on a Intro to public speaking course and the teacher is looking for us to choose a topic now, for the final presentation. It has to involve human communication. I think Sesame Street sounds like an interesting choice, especially considering HBO is doing great things with it now. I have no idea how to even start and tackle this idea. I am just looking for a first line or something. Can anyone help me out? Thanks

So, it's my best mates wedding on Sunday and for three weeks now i've been racking my brains on what to say, paranoid that it won't be funny enough, won't have the right content and will sound silly #anxiouslad.

I have written the majority of the speech but seemed to have plateaued at a kew point.... Please see below...

"As I’m sure many of you here today are aware, Toby has had a passion for business, and the creation of wealth, since the moment he came kicking and screaming in to this world… and the tale I’ve decided to share today, is one of entrepreneurship, hard work and innovative thinking – Toby’s first business venture  – Sponge Bob Enterprise.   Sponge Bob Enterprise was incorporated at the beginning of 2012, the businesses main objective was to clean as many ****** (family business name) company cars as possible, charging his fathers company as much as possible, whilst paying his staff, as little as possible. A couple of weeks into the venture, I received a text from Toby, suggesting an opportunity for employment with his new business was on the horizon…….

….. Interior shine specialist,……… i was informed…. Obviously, at the age of 17 i was over the moon at the thought of this new position,..... my enthusiasm was premature. On closer inspection....

Job’s included……

• Polishing the gear shaft "

I would like to come up with 3 funny activities i could be preforming whilst cleaning the interior of the car, references to the gear stick are easy.... it's other i'm struggling to come up with...

Any help would be appreciated.

Thank You :)

im trying to write a paper and the prompt is, You are telling someone about a Game Series you want to pitch to a game company, how would you tell people about it

and i want to keep it sounding like im doing something conversational, because i think that would be a good balance for what i want it to be like and im thinking of using something like this template, https://shared.uoit.ca/shared/department/student-life/student-learning-centre/nool/documents/essay-outline-template.pdf but i dont know how to plug in my points to the parts of the speech, without the person getting lost in what im talking about, could you guys give me some help with this

i was doing an example outline using this sites methods and i got this as just something quick

Purpose

- Why you should make Fan Works

Analyze Your Audience

(i dont know what this part means but i think its)

People who want to gain a following, but dont know where to start

Condense your Message to Basics

Making Fan Works will help you in every aspect

Strike the Right Tone

Mostly Jokey nd Comedic, But foremost have it be informative

Pull them in with a good intro

Alot of your favorite Content Creators, started out making Fan Works

Perfect the Flow

Toby Fox and Undertale

Living Tombstone

Rebecca Sugar

Kira Buckland

End Strong

Why you feel that making fanart isnt professional, or your told that, just know the best things come in the most unexpected of packages (or something liek that)

Hi I am writing a humourous declamation/ speech on the boss is always right I was hoping for some pointers it has to be around 3 mins long I had written one up but the speech had no real flow to it

Hi guys and gals, I’m new here. I need to send a video message to a friend who is suffering with stage 4 cancer. I would love to be funny and give him a little bit of laughter, but also don’t want to be too insensitive as his spirits are pretty down. We are not super close, but have enjoyed some heart to hearts in the past and have had fun “breaking each other’s balls” so to speak in the past. Any tips, ideas or fully written scripts would be greatly appreciated. Thank you!

Hello, my fellow American citizens and citizens of the world. These are historic days we live in. For they are historic in ways we ourselves will determine. Because instead of reading about history we have a chance to make it! You see all to often we hear of the evil deeds men do. Please make no mistake evil is not the only force in humankind. As all of us have a voice in making history. Let that voice be a voice of all that is good in civilization! I say to you that if you are a person of humanness, civility and kindness. We in America stand with you. And we hope you will stand with us. Because it is we who will answer the questions. Where is the civility in civilization? Where is the kindness in human kind? What kind of world will we make not for ourselves but for our children? Freedom, civility. The right to be treated with dignity, kindness and respect! These are the rights of all the people on earth we believe this. These are core values of America. I love my country. Do you? If so, I call on you to be part of this history and walk with us the American people. No matter what your race, religion or social stand. We will take together a new path in humankinds history. Not just for America but for the World! Let all that is good in you be the start of change. For you, for your neighbor, your family and your country and the world! Standing on the side of humanity. On the side of goodness. America will stand with you! And though we have started in America we can hope our voice will spread throughout to all peoples no matter their geological borders or their ideological differences. Those people that long to be free equal and progress in human kinds quest to become a worthy people who will leave their legacy in the vast expanses of the Universe. And not on the remains of a smoldering planet that gave into he evilness. The ignorance of destructive and anti humane ways of some evil men. I call on the decent morally upright humanity of the influential billionaires of America. Our country has given you the opportunity that you have grasped for yourselves. The Gates, the Zuckerburgs, the Bezos and the Muskes of America. To use some of their fortunes to help the country that has helped them. For programs that will make a impact on the citizens of the world. To help the environment, for we can all show each other the true meaning of civility, compassion and empathy we need to how to others. Because all people know when you are kind to other and don't do it to help them only, but also to help yourself. But also to help yourself. Please remember to smile and show some positivity in yourself., because in the end we are all citizens of the world! For we will not be the naysayers of yesterdays gone by. You see we are the yes men of the tomorrows to come.

God bless America, God bless the World.

Thank you for your time, Papa Kind

Writing a persuasive speech that's gotta be 5-7 minutes long on pulling down the statues (one what happened in Bristol.) Ant idea how to have a decent sounding start or impactful ending? I'm good at delivering speeches but not so good at writing them.. :s