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u/comesinallpackages Feb 28 '23
Watch out for that first page, it's a doozy!
Seriously, though. My best advice is go read the screenplays of some of your favorite movies and look into using screenwriting software. There are free options out there, if you're on a budget. Good luck!
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u/Berenstain_Bro Feb 27 '23
I won't read scripts with camera directions in it. Its one of my top 'no-no's'.
Plus, you didn't provide a logline or tell us what genre this is. What if its a horror script?
I'm not a big fan of the horror genre, so I typically avoid those scripts if I see it in the headlines.
Just providing you with some basic 'FYI' so you can improve your experience on here.
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u/mooningyou Feb 28 '23
As per my advice in your previous post, you need screenwriting software. Don't use MS Word or Google docs because they do not format properly. There are good free ones around if you don't want to buy one.
Read other screenplays and look at the differences between those and yours. You need to make your script look like the ones that you read.
You need to remove every line that starts with 'CAMERA SWITCHES...' These do not belong in a screenplay. Also, remove all those other camera directions.
Look up how to write a scene header.
Introduce your characters when we see them. If you don't know how to do that, look it up.
Don't bother telling us about LEFT and RIGHT. These are things that will be sorted out by the director at the time this is shot.
There are specific formats to follow when writing a screenplay and unfortunately your script misses so many of them. Most people will see this and simply close the file without even reading page 1. You have a lot of work to do to fix this. You need to make some effort to present your script in the proper format or there's no point in writing a screenplay.
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u/mooningyou Feb 27 '23
Good to see you're now using a platform to share your work however only you can access it.
You need to change the permissions of your file to 'anyone with the link' and then post the new link.
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Feb 28 '23
The script is a mess, but there's no such thing as a shooting script that adds in all the camera directions. The only real difference with a shooting script is that the page numbers get a little funny with revisions, and the scenes are numbered.
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Feb 28 '23
I've been on sets. There is no such thing as a revised script that adds in the camera direction. The Batman script was written with camera directions because that's Matt Reeve and Peter Craig's writing style — it wasn't because it was a "shooting draft".
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Feb 28 '23
Yeah, this script is total mess, and the camera directions really get in the way. But I still don't think there's such a thing as script a director prepares with every camera angle and cut marked down — that's what shot lists and storyboards are for, and the script supervisor marks down which shots cover which pieces of action in a script. I've never, ever seen a script like the one you've described.
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u/HPBTAS Feb 27 '23
https://drive.google.com/file/d/18sjLnHAiQK-l0vUW5jtGj9II8mpjwcAM/view?usp=drivesdk
It should work now