I've revised this short novella 8 times so far and I would love to have a beta reader or 2 read it and provide constructive criticism about how the story flows and holds your interest. This is a gay romance in the fantasy genre without any overt sex scenes. Be truthful and honest, I will not get mad if you have negative comments, but I hope they will be constructive so I can make the appropriate changes. Also, let me know what format you need. I can provide anything from MS Word to PDF and ebook format. Thank you in advance, Jalen.

Anybody interested in beta reading an upcoming Asia-focused YA scifi?

Tan lives on a tiny island in the middle of the South China Sea. Like all of the refugees, she's trapped by both poverty and politics. To make matters worse, a satellite uplink lets Tan glimpse the outside world: everywhere else, humanity is enjoying a dazzling, exciting future. Most work has been automated, and life has become a never-ending vacation.

One day, Tan is contacted by an enigmatic billionaire. He needs Tan's help to recover a mysterious technological artifact called The Wallbreaker. It's a chance to make life better, not only for Tan, but for her entire island.

Tan's adventure takes her into the Greater Pacific Assembly, a futuristic hyperpower offering a luxurious quality of life to all its citizens. She flies her own Lamborghini Venturelli and enjoys cutting-edge virtual technology, but the journey isn't all fun and games...

The Wallbreaker will enable the creation of true Artificial Intelligence, and powerful groups will stop at nothing to keep that from happening.

It's a rough 1st draft so I'm not overly worried about grammar or sentence flow. My greatest concerns are with the narrative, plot flow, and quality of world-building. If you don't know anything about Asia or Artificial Intelligence, even better.

Please post below or PM if you have any interest!

Title: The Paladin

Current Word Count: 140k (Hoping to drop to 100k after betas and edits)

Genre: Urban Fantasy / Paranormal Some Adult Language

Chapter Length: ~2,500 per chapter (short chapters!)

Blurb: Jonathan Sutter is young seminarian at an eastern US college, studying for the priesthood when his life is turned upside down by the appearance of a demon possessing a small girl. After saving the girl and discovering his gift for exorcism, Jonathan is whisked away by a secret organization called the Paladin Order, a group that has protected mankind from monsters, ghost, and demons since time immemorial. But why is everyone so interested in Jonathan's abilities and what is this clandestine order hiding from him?

I use BetaBooks.co for my betas. The first 20 chapters are up and ready for review. If you don't want to do that, I can send you chapters, instead.

EDIT: Everything is now up on GoogleDocs. Just shoot me a message and I'll give you an invite. I can also give you a link to my website where I'm hosting the first three chapters.

Does this sounds like something you'd read?

Rita Ford lives a life a life of leisure but it all ends when someone visits. She was the shrew who tossed maids out on the street but it is now Rita's turn.

Get in touch if your interested. Honest feedback is what I'm after.

I have written an urban fantasy story in a similar vain to the Skulduggery Pleasant series but more mature in tone. I can't get it published but I don't know what to change as nobody tells me why it didn't make the grade. As such I am wanting candid feedback and opinions to help smooth out any rough edges that I may have missed.

So let me know if you are interested in giving the story a read. Thanks. Summery below:

Their mother found crucified and their father taken by mythological creatures that they had always believed unreal, KT and Kai must delve into a dangerous sub-society of magic and monsters. Under the guidance of the cynical monster hunter known as Déaþscúa, they must learn how to fight in a war that is far bigger than even Déaþscúa had ever imagined.

I have a few beta readers at this time but I'm looking for a few more to help edit and get feedback on my new novel. I self-edited my last one and that didn't really work out too well.

He Sings Sha La La is a post-apocalyptic tale filled with zombies, cannibals and mutant beasts. There's some metaphysical elements at work as well. The story is centered around a young man who vows to protect the woman he loves, even in death. The transformation he undergoes in his quest to keep his oath transcends his initial sentiment and reveals an unforeseen side effect of his undying love. As memories reignite the personality within his rotting vessel, he becomes more aware of his own heartache and desire to protect those he cares for from the evil that has overtaken the world.

Email me at [email protected] for details.

Hello there Isobel. Do you like romantic comedies? Do you like science fiction? Do you like the 1980s?

If you didn't even had to think before answering any of these questions then Ashbow is the story for you.

Aren't you tired of reading about the same boy on girl, boy on boy or girl on girl love stories? Don't you feel like something's missing?

My company is prepared to publish a series of novelettes which follow the misadventures of a lovesick quadrillionare bigender who has way too much fun. The story takes place in a future where the gender binary is completely nonexistent, giving way to hundreds of different genders.

The pilot's manuscript is a little under eight thousand words.

If you are interested in becoming a beta reader for us, please leave us a PM we can fill you in on the details.

Sincerely, Puppy Paint.

It's a friendly, supportive writing sub reddit. You can post links to your writing. Get feedback, Brainstorm and communicate with other writers. r/writeworld

I want to share a couple of rough chapters, but I can't just add a PDF or paste it into here without it looking like shit. How do I upload pages of work?

Hello!

I'm not sure how things work around here, so tell me if I'm doing something wrong.

I've been writing four chapters of my Harry Potter based fan fiction, and I would like to know if its any good and would like some constructive criticism on it.

You can find it here.

I hope you could help and any help will be greatly appreciated!

https://archiveofourown.org/works/10835424

Chapter 1 is Ok i think, I had some helping me with it, This Fanfic will be long slice of life, I will like to have sameone care about Nisekoi to help me with it.

It have lots of sex (No rape or gore) the fic is just fun story with lots of character moments and sweet tears, the tune is happy, I love happy stories with hugs and tears and more hugs.

The sex is between cute characters that love each other so much.

Later there maybe lesbian sex (Just if you no into this things), and the story about one guy build a relationship with five girls.

I just don't want to feel that a tricked any one into samething they don't want to work on.

thanks for reading, PM me if you want to help.

Beta reader needed!

Genre: Horror

Word Count: 100,000

Notes: My book is on its 3rd draft, so I feel that I've ironed out almost all inconsistencies and punctuation mistakes. I'm mostly looking for someone who can tell me if some part confuses them or feels too 'cluttered', I'm not looking for story direction.

Summary: The book is about a man whose son has recently died and his marriage has fallen apart. He's contacted by another man that says the death is not all it seems to be. He's then introduced to the idea of monsters known as changelings, that sneak into homes at night to take children and leave their own.

This story is about hunting monsters and trying not to become one.

Please let me know if anyone is interested!

Hello. I would love to hear if there are any beta readers that are actually looking for poetry. My book is 8k words.

My normal beta reader won't answer me for some reason so I really, really, really need someone to read this story for me because I need to post it ASAP

I'm in the beta process for my first completed novel and I would like to find at least one beta reader outside of my own circle; actually, I'd love to find more than one, but I'm hoping for at least one. I can provide whoever would like to help with a critique of their work in kind.

My Query:

The Warden has given everything to his ideals of truth and justice, upholding these beliefs to protect the people of Elyria. However, when confronted with the murder of his sworn blood-brother, Elyrian King Krian Da’kul, he faces a catalyst that pushes him past the limits of his own convictions.

Driven to find his King’s killer before word escapes, the Warden partakes in Elyria’s Masquerade in order to secretly investigate the lives and politics of those nearest Krian, unraveling hidden truths within each of their shadowed lies. As midnight nears, the Warden confronts his brother’s killer and his creed bleeds ever deeper into vengeance, leaving him a grave choice: either rob the people of justice by taking the killer’s life with his own hands, or truly uphold his beliefs—possibly losing the killer, and his own life, in the process.

What I would love in a beta is:

• First and foremost - a critique on the story, characters, and setting (what works, doesn't work, is confusing)

• Does this work as a standalone in a series? (It is the first of a planned four-part series, and I've plotted them out so that each one definitively ends. Only the main thread continues on into the next book until its conclusion in part four.)

• Copy-editing

• Overall enjoyment of the book as a whole and of each chapter as a whole (enticing read from beginning to end? slow in parts? too fast through something?)

If you are interested in reading, please let me know in the comments the best way to get it to you (what format you want - I've already formatted a prototype ebook copy in most formats that is nearly identical to the printed version).

I'm looking to start querying around December, so I've set a deadline of November 25th, 2016.

For those interested, I thank you! For those not interested, I would also love to hear back as to why you're not interested as that in itself is valuable feedback :)

Not looking for copy editing for this. Just quality of content. i.e Plot holes inconsistencies and just overall thoughts on things that may not seem right.

The Old Gods is my second novel, and I'm looking for as many beta-readers as possible.

Synopsis:

The Old Gods is about two children who stumble upon the resting place for a host of centuries old malevolent spirits, and how this discovery affects the rest of their lives as they spend every moment haunted by the phantoms they unleashed. They become witnesses and tools to a fate beyond their influence and understanding, thrusting them into decisions they never imagined they'd have to face. The book explores the lives they have to lead and how they deal with the phantoms as children, teens, and as adults.

At this stage I'm looking for larger critiques, rather than grammatical ones: more about characters, plot, the overarching entirety of the novel and what does and doesn't work for you, where it slows down, where it does or doesn't work. Everything like that.

Thank you.

Here's the opening chapter, to give you a feel for the book and see if you're interested.

Opening Chapter

(OK, I write a lot and I can never define a single genre.)

In a world where dreams are heavily policed, Josh wakes up to two things: a strange blue demon at the foot of his bed who calls itself a 'Dream Thief'. And that he is now the second most wanted terrorist in the country, and wanted by The Rembrancers - The Dream Police.

Now he's running for his life, accompanied by a supernatural creature, for a dream he doesn't remember having, but is apparently the entire key to both The Dream Thieves, The Rembrancers, and Benjamin, a sudden ally, and The Rembrancers No.1 most wanted.

(I also suck at writing blurbs)

Hey guys! Thanks for checking this out. This is a short novella I plan on self-publishing for free as soon as possible, and I need as many beta-readers as possible.

At this stage I'm looking less for line-edits (though, who am I kidding, I need that too), and more for plot-holes, character's, motivations - the general 'did you like it?' 'What didn't you like?' 'What could be improved?'

But a main concern is plot-holes, and if it all makes sense, and if you understand everything coming out of it. If you still have questions about how things occurred, or why certain things couldn't occur, I really need to know. Thanks guys!

Comment below and I'll PM you a Gdoc.

Hello!

I'm looking for beta readers 16 years and up who would read my manuscript for story/character development/plot holes etc. rather than grammar and spelling. There are 62 chapters in total. Most are no more than ten pages long. I send one chapter at a time and after its been read, I ask a series of questions related to the chapter. I prefer to conduct these interviews over Twitter or Facebook messenger. Below, I have included my novel's blurb. If this novel interests you, please message me. I'd really appreciate your help! :)

(BTW: My Twitter is: https://twitter.com/KateLittleBug )

Blurb for "In Essence":

In Essence, the fifth and most controversial of the five realms overseen by the twelve Gods and Goddesses of the Land Above, a young woman named Essie wakes in a jungle with no memory of her past. Kneeling at her side is a distraught young man named Darius, who tells her an unsettling revelation: she's not human, or at least, she never used to be.

Faced with this fact, Essie tries to navigate her new life, which proves challenging. To add more complications, an old foe arrives. Because of him, the entire realm of Essence finds itself at war, maddening the Gods and Goddesses in the Land Above. Old friends rush to Essie's aid, urging her to do something about it, but Essie doesn't understand why she has to be the hero. Regardless, if the war isn't stopped, not only will Essie's plans for her new life go up in flames, but the rest of Essence will too.

I’m really looking for someone to bounce ideas off of, considering I get stuck with Writer’s Block a lot, so that would be a lot of help. I’m pretty strict with my grammar but, ya know, not everyone’s perfect and I’ll occasionally miss things. I typically only write one chapter at a time. It’d be greatly appreciated if you have somewhat of a flexible schedule and aren’t irritated by someone sending you a bunch of messages right after another since I get ideas very quickly. I prefer text to emailing and document comments, so if you’d be willing to trade numbers or Facebook messages that’d be awesome too.

New author looking for some Beta Readers! my book is called "Get Out Of Dodge" and its a Contemporary Thriller for YA, at 19,800 words (Novella length). Would love some Beta Reader's.

Summary: The beasts bellow in the woods. They are deeper in there, but closer than Trevor would ever want them. Trevor's summer camp experience went from Heavenly to Hellish in four days; from enjoying the lake in the sunset to barely escaping with his life from the clutches of demons. If they are dead on the inside, did they even survive?

A snippit from the story: Trevor!” Requise screams. “Don’t

look at the blades!”

I blink. Don’t look at the blades? I

shut my eyes, and I can feel something wet and slimy slide over my eyelids, and my nose

then my lips. From its texture, I was pretty sure it was a tongue. I squirm, but it keeps me held tightly. The saliva begins to burn my skin…

    CRACK!!

    Suddenly the weight falls off my body, and I wipe my eyelids, getting up off the ground. The creature had been hit in the side of the head by a rock, and was now bleeding, dark black blood.

Would be honored to have you part of my team!

"Forged in Heat" working title is a relatively light-hearted male/male romance that takes place in a fantasy version of the late Edo period of medieval Japan.

In a world where humans are born with magic in their blood that can only be drawn out through the use of special "living" weapons that are forged with manufactured souls and consciousness inside them. The novel follows a mercenary, Miyuki, and his purchase of his first weapon, their subsequent relationship, and how it forces him to reevaluate what he knows about weapons and how he's been taught by society to think of weapons as a whole.